Donate Your Car Sacramento

I’m 14 years old and interested in a writing career, can you critique this story and tell me what you think of it and what you think i should do better on it?(yes i know it’s kinda long but please read it through)
here it is:
The Pledge
By Harrison Israel

The year was 2408 and the world had been saved. Humanity had once washed over the Earth in a sea of destruction. With the signing of the Agreement after the Ruination the human race had retreated to self-sustained Cities to leave nature alone once and for all.
The Ruination, what could be said about it? In this short span of minutes enough weapon energy had been released by mankind to decimate the civilizations of Old. In the ages of savagery that followed, a few men stepped forward to take the reins of command to form the World State, united, powerful, and eternal. These men were the Controllers. The world was finally at peace.
The Controller strode through the halls of the Palace with a carefree look set upon his face. The man stood near seven feet tall and his face showed the scars of his many surgeries. The Controller’s surgeons had carved his cheekbones into dangerous points and black contacts had been inserted under his irises. If any man looked upon the Controller’s face they would have seen the point of his hideous operations. The Controller had designed his appearance to strike fear into the hearts of his subjects. The Controller walked to a window and looked upon the metropolis beneath him. Citizens moved about the streets to their assignments around the City, guided by the computer chips implanted into their brains at birth. The unique computer system that had been grafted into the Controller’s nervous system identified every citizen the Controller saw by number.
The lights on the opaque glass dome that encased the City glinted dully in the comparative darkness of the City below. In the distance, the gargantuan silicon factories began to warm up as they prepared to produce the wealth of Haven City. The Controller grinned, a vicious expression on the face of the deformed man, at the way the City moved. This was his City, the citizens were his people, and this was his world. The power of his World State compelled the Controller.
The Master of New Sacramento waited on his servant impatiently. The new day had arrived and he was restless sitting in his large manor. The Master stood five feet tall (for there had been a terrible error made during his enhancement surgery at birth) and he had piercing blue eyes that were nearly hidden by a crop of blond hair. The Master’s luxurious hovercar soared into the cavernous Hovercar Bay. The Master stepped into the car and his driver, a woman named Citizen 368, pulled the car away from the manor. The car traveled through the vast City, past citizens working at the silicon factories and past robots tending to the fields. The Master opaqued his window at that point to prevent himself from seeing any more of the lower class scum that populated the City.
The Ruins of Old Sacramento had always held a certain appeal for the Master. Here lay the ruins of a city of Old, one of the last remnants of the men who had cried out for the sense of order that the World State provided for all men. The car pulled up to the Ruins and the Master stepped out of the car to walk among the burned-out shells of buildings as Citizen 368 waited patiently for her Master.
“Curious,” said the Master, “that these men expanded so quickly, yet went out like a light in their last days,”
Citizen 638 said nothing because she knew that her Master was of the “odd” type that sometimes were born in the World State. The Master came to a building of the darkest ivory whose roof had collapsed a long time ago. He stopped for a moment and then went forth into the building to find himself in a hallway filled with books on shelves. The Master knew a little about books. They had been things made of paper that the men of Old had painted their characters on. Books had been banned in the World State because the Controllers considered them to be “destructive to the order of society”. The Master knew how to read characters and he picked a book out and opened it to a page that read
-”I pledge allegiance

To the flag of the United States of America and to the Republic for which it stands: One nation, under G-d, indivisible, With liberty and justice for all.”
As he read the strange words the Master wondered what the United States of America was and what the G-d the men of Old who had written the words had spoken of. What he understood of the words was that once, long ago it seemed that men had believed in unification for freedom, not prosperity, and that they lived even more free than he, the Master of his City was now. The Master wished no more to prowl the Ruins of a dead civilization. He motioned to Citizen 368 to start the hovercar and he got in and the vehicle sped away into the sunrise.
That night the Master looked out over t

When my lease is up in August I plan on moving from North Carolina to somewhere in or around Sacramento. I am curious as to how good the public transportation is in Sacramento. I lived in Chicago for over 20 years and grew very accustomed to not having to use a car while living there. I am also curious about neighborhoods that are more downtown than outlying suburbs. Any information will be appreciated. Thank you.

In 2007 I donated a car to charity and I’m not sure how to deduct it . I did get a letter stating that it’s gone for under $500, so do I just claim $500? I’m not sure how this works. Any help would be appreciated. Thank you!

I am a 27 year old male with healthy black hair. I live in sacramento, CA. I’d like to donate my hair. Is there a need, and what do I do?

What is the statute limitations of a car accident that happened in Sacramento, California on December 09,2006. The people I was in an accident with got an attorney on Nov 21, 2008, but I was just given my lawsuit July 5, 2009 can they still sue me and my insurance or it is to late for them to do anything to me??? Thank you for the responses

My husband and I moved out to California back in July. We literally live in the middle of no where. 2 Hours north of Sacramento. We are going home for Easter (Chicago) and are looking for a limo service that would pick us up and take us to the airport. Since this town is so small it seems that we can’t find anyone to take us. I did call one Limo service and he wanted $200.00!!!! I was shocked w/ this price. Does anyone know of a Limo/Shuttle service near by and cheaper? We are in Lake County. Our car is older and we are not sure if it would make it to the airport so, we don’t want to chance it. Any info would be greatly appreciated.

A friend of mine was killed last night in an automobile accident. I would like to set up a way for people to make donations for his children, but have no idea where to start. Please help.

I am wondering if anyone knows how well the State usually takes care of their cars. I know that once the car hits 150,000 miles they will usually sell it at an auction. I am thinking about trying to get a car at one of these auction in Sacramento. The cars are sold as is. The website says “All vehicles and lot items are sold “AS IS”, “WHERE IS.” THERE ARE NO WARRANTIES (EXPRESSED OR IMPLIED), ADJUSTMENTS, REPAIRS, REFUNDS, OR EXCHANGES.”

So I am just wondering if this would be a good deal and if the cars are usually in pretty good shape.

Thanks!

Hi, Im getting married next month and I would love to drive and old antique car from ceremony to reception, but I got a little problem, I have no idea where to get such a car. I search all internet sites but Im still out of luck. Plz help. I have only a month left. Thank you sooo much!!!

Hey guys. Im looking at buying a used corvette here soon, but im trying to find information on how much it cost to actually register the car and everything once you buy it. You still have to pay tax even on a used car right? I wanna try and get an estimate of how much it will be so i can factor that into my total spending allowance i want to stay within.

Looking at getting something around the 15k price mark. So thats about 1200 Tax already right? What else am i goint to run into?
In sacramento california

Why did it switch over to E-tran system? I think it’s lame…because if someone lived in Elk Grove and wanted to transport to somewhere else in the Sacramento area but does not have a car or wants to save gas…it would be hard. Also, why don’t we have a light rail station? I live in Elk Grove, and I like using the light rail alot (I’ve used it a couple of times because Sac City College has a light rail station and me and my friends would use it to go out to lunch) because it’s faster than a regular bus and safer than driving.

http://online.wsj.com/article/SB124511811033017539.html

The White House Fires a Watchdog
The curious case of the inspector general and a Presidential ally.

President Obama swept to office on the promise of a new kind of politics, but then how do you explain last week’s dismissal of federal Inspector General Gerald Walpin for the crime of trying to protect taxpayer dollars? This is a case that smells of political favoritism and Chicago rules.

A George W. Bush appointee, Mr. Walpin has since 2007 been the inspector general for the Corporation for National and Community Service, the federal agency that oversees such subsidized volunteer programs as AmeriCorps. In April 2008 the Corporation asked Mr. Walpin to investigate reports of irregularities at St. HOPE, a California nonprofit run by former NBA star and Obama supporter Kevin Johnson. St. HOPE had received an $850,000 AmeriCorps grant, which was supposed to go for three purposes: tutoring for Sacramento-area students; the redevelopment of several buildings; and theater and art programs.

Mr. Walpin’s investigators discovered that the money had been used instead to pad staff salaries, meddle politically in a school-board election, and have AmeriCorps members perform personal services for Mr. Johnson, including washing his car.

By “transparency”, did Barry actually mean “fire anyone who desires it”?
Sorry for the type-o, that was supposed to be “where”.